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Some people think saving money is good, but others think that spending money is a better way to enjoy life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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There are several factors that can cause someone to enjoy
life
 more. One of those factors is
Money
.
While
 a group of thought believe that investing
money
 in a bank is wiser than spending
this
 asset on everyday
life
 transactions, another group say spending
money
 without overthinking about the
future
 can make
people
 happier.
This
 essay will discuss both these views, and it will mention why I think that saving
money
 might be a good thing to do. On the one hand, Some
people
 think that saving
money
 is important to secure a
future
such
 as children's education, paying a downpayment for a new home or buying a new car. If
people
 were to spend all of their income and save little, they would have built a weak financial
future
.
On the other hand
, another group thinks that one should live their
life
 by spending
money
 not putting it away. In
this
 case, they can be happier without worrying too much to save earnings.
for example
,
people
 can feel happy when they upgrade their phones, go on a cruise ship or have dinner at a fancy restaurant with some friends. They doubt the point of obtaining and stacking income without using it. In my opinion, I think that saving
money
 is more important than spending it on leisure activities because with a solid
future
 comes happy
life
.
to conclude
 all, for sure saving
money
 is good for us, growing a habit of spending it can cause relief in
life
.
However
, for sure some spending can present its advantages. In my opinion, I think that saving is more important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Security
  • Freedom
  • Pursue dreams and goals
  • Emergency funds
  • Experiences
  • Enjoyment
  • Quality of life
  • Improving
  • Purchases
  • Supporting
  • Economy
  • Creating jobs
  • Balance
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