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The plan below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the transformation of a
school
 between 1985 and the present.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
school
 has undergone significant development to accommodate the growing number of students,
with
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the most prominent features of which are additional classrooms and the construction of educational and sports facilities. The
school
 population was 1500 students in 1985, after which it has risen to 2300 students at present. Regarding the car park area in the north,
while
 the entrance and the exit stay unchanged, the road has been more curvy, resulting in the semi-circle shape of the car park.
Moreover
, there is no longer a path leading to the playing field in the south and it has been replaced by trees. Turning to
school
 amenities, the office in the northwest still remains
whereas
 the library below it has been reduced in length and converted into Learning Resources Centre which includes a computer room. The car park nearby the road has been removed and the classrooms to its south have been expanded and relocated to the southwest right above the newly built pool and fitness
center
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. In the eastern area, the classroom block has been upgraded from 2-story to 3-story and there is
also
 the erection of additional classrooms. The playing field in the south has been narrowed by half
due to
 mentioned constructions.
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