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Biological warfare is the use of infectious agents with the intent to kill humans as an act of war. Some People believe that this type of warfare should be legally regularized by the UN. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Biological warfare has been the subject of multiple debates in the past decades. Some people believe that it should be regularized by the United Nations.
Regulation
 of
such
 controversial subjects always comes with multiple agreements and disagreements. In
this
 essay, I will share my personal
idea
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 about
this
 matter. On the one hand, biological weapons are a threat to humankind. These weapons can cause catastrophic casualties and irreversible effects.
For example
, intentionally spreading a contagious disease in an area can harm children, adolescents and elderly citizens.
Moreover
, they can harm the genes and even influence future generations, generations that will only read about
this
 infection in history books but will be suffering from its
long time
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 effects.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that the production, usage and development of these weapons should be controlled.
On the other hand
,
regulation
 of biological warfare can create time-consuming bureaucratic procedures during scientific research.
As a result
, interest and investment in biological investigations will decrease and
this
 field's progress will face difficulties.
For instance
, an essential and life-saving experiment that can end up with the invention of a vaccine will be likely to
last
 longer or deal with financial problems. So
this
regulation
 can have some insufficient influences on beneficial research works, especially in the field of microbiology.
To conclude
, the United Nations should not hesitate to protect humankind and the next generations and any procrastination in the
regulation
 of biological warfare by international organizations is unacceptable.
However
,
this
 goal should be achieved without blocking scientific progress.
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