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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, some individuals think that voluntary
service
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 should be made mandatory for all secondary school pupils
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, others feel it should be optional. I completely disagree with making unpaid
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 mandatory for all
students
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. On one hand, making unpaid community
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 compulsory for
students
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 doesn't avail them the opportunity of having a personal interest in the
job
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 because they feel they are been forced and
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 hinders them from acquiring the necessary skills that are meant to be gained
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 performing the
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 which is one of the curial reasons for the school adding it to their curriculum.
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,
students
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 deployed to various duty posts to perform voluntary services under compulsion are usually ill-mannered at their place of
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. They are often seen reporting late to
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, or not coming to
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 without prior notice or the recipients of their services filing complaints of their dissatisfaction because of their lack of the zeal
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 required in performing their roles effectively.
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, pupils who are given the liberty to decide whether they want to participate in voluntary services or not, usually perform better because they put their mind to the
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 being rendered and ensure they get a good appraisal from their supervisor after their stay.
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,
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 who choose to participate in unpaid jobs willfully tend to select a
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 that aligns with the course they want to study at the university and
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 provides them with the opportunity to learn on the
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.
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,
students
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 volunteer to
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 in the hospital because they want to be a medical professional in future, or to
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 in a pet store because they want to study veterinary medicine. In conclusion,
students
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 partaking in unpaid jobs is highly beneficial to their cognitive, psychomotor and affective domains of learning
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, they should be given the free will to decide whether to participate or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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