The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how much US government budgets were poured into research across four specific
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over a 28-year period from 1980, measured in billions of dollars.
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, the expenditures allocated for other
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dropped slightly,
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those for the rest encountered rises of varying degrees, with the most pronounced growth being seen in Health, which ended up as the field with the most funding by far. Looking first at the financial allocations sponsored for
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Health and
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Space, the former commenced the period at just north of 8
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dollars, which was 2
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more than the corresponding figures for the latter, at around 6
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.
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, there was a remarkable escalation in the funding of Health, finishing at nearly 18
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, despite reaching a zenith of over 22
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in 2004. Similar changes, but to a lesser extent, can be observed in Space's data, increasing fairly to just shy of 9
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at the end
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. Turning to the remaining
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, the disparity between them, in terms of funds, was more obvious over time. The energy industry accumulated more subsidies, from 5 to about 7
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period. As for General Science, its expenditures showed a twofold rise from 2.5 to 5
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in the first 2 decades
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and
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remained unchanged.
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, 7.5
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was sponsored for unspecified
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in 1980, with a fall to 5
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after 4 years and a prolonged plateau that persisted until 2008.
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