The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates how much US government budgets were poured into research across four specific
sectors
over a 28-year period from 1980, measured in billions of dollars.
Overall
, the expenditures allocated for other
sectors
dropped slightly,
whereas
those for the rest encountered rises of varying degrees, with the most pronounced growth being seen in Health, which ended up as the field with the most funding by far. Looking first at the financial allocations sponsored for
the
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Health and
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Space, the former commenced the period at just north of 8
billion
dollars, which was 2
billion
more than the corresponding figures for the latter, at around 6
billion
.
Thereafter
, there was a remarkable escalation in the funding of Health, finishing at nearly 18
billion
, despite reaching a zenith of over 22
billion
in 2004. Similar changes, but to a lesser extent, can be observed in Space's data, increasing fairly to just shy of 9
billion
at the end
. Turning to the remaining
sectors
, the disparity between them, in terms of funds, was more obvious over time. The energy industry accumulated more subsidies, from 5 to about 7
billion
after
this
period. As for General Science, its expenditures showed a twofold rise from 2.5 to 5
billion
in the first 2 decades
,
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and
then
remained unchanged.
Finally
, 7.5
billion
was sponsored for unspecified
sectors
in 1980, with a fall to 5
billion
after 4 years and a prolonged plateau that persisted until 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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