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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram compares temperature zones of tropical and temperate
mountains
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 in terms of differences in their distribution and altitudinal range.
It is clear that
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 tropical
mountains
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 have a wider range of altitude-based temperature zones compared to temperate
mountains
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, reaching higher altitudes before encountering permanent snow.
Overall
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, the cultivation of crops and tree limits
also
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 differ significantly between the two mountain types. In tropical
mountains
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, the warm
zone
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 extends from sea level to roughly 550
meters
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, providing optimal conditions for various tropical crops. As the elevation increases, the temperate
zone
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, spanning
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about 1,750
meters
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, is predominantly utilized for coffee and cocoa plantations.
In contrast
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, temperate
mountains
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 feature a cool
zone
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 ranging from 0 to 1,500
meters
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 that
accommodates
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 grain cultivation, potatoes,
flax
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and flax
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, and
marks
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 the limit for broad-leaf trees. Continuing upward, the cool
zone
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 in tropical
mountains
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,
limiting
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 at 3,000
meters
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, supports grain cultivation and sets the boundary for broad-leaf trees. Above
this
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zone
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, pine and fir forests thrive between 3,000 and 3,800
meters
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, followed by alpine meadows from 3,800 to 4,300
meters
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, and permanent snow above 4,300
meters
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. In temperate
mountains
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,
however
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, spruce forests dominate between 1,500 and 1,750
meters
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,
while
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 alpine meadows emerge from 1,750 to 2,750
meters
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, and permanent snow begins at 2,750
meters
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