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Many children these days have their own mobile phones what are the advantage and disadvantage of it.

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 and tablets are readily available these days and most of the population is able to afford them at reasonable prices
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 the advancement of technology. But having access to
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 technology at an early stage can be both advantageous and disadvantageous. Both of the viewpoints
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 will be discussed in the coming paragraphs. One of the important areas of child
development
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 is that of intelligence. And with technology available to
children
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 primarily mobile
phones
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, they are able to explore and learn very complex features of them at an early stage.
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 enhances their brain
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 and increases their
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 intelligence.
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, with tablets and mobile
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 handy, they can even watch learning videos and can attend lectures
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 sitting at home.
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, during the COVID pandemic, all the
children
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 attended their lectures through mobile
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 or tablets virtually.
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 prevented the loss of their academic year which
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 would have cost them their entire year. With advantages, come disadvantages as well. The foremost disadvantage is the impact on the
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 health of
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. Kids these days are not at all going out to play with their friends. Rather, they are playing online games on mobile
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.
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 greatly hinders their physical
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. Not only their physical
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 but mental and social
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 is getting impacted. They are not as self-confident and social as they used to be because of a loss of interaction with their counterparts. In conclusion,
children
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 should be given mobile
phones
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 in a controlled manner. They can be granted access to the phone for a certain amount of time during their day, and the rest of the time they should be encouraged to play outside with their friends.
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, mobile
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 can be given only if an urgent necessity arises.
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