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Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

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At present, there is a wide range of the population who holds the view that advertising make a negative effect on some people's lives,
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 other groups of the community argue that advertising brings a lot of benefits to themselves.
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 essay supports the first group and will discuss both sides' profits and drawbacks of it. In terms of advantages, the advertisement is a successful key part of our modern world ,especially for businessmen, the company needs to tell their customers about their
product
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 by advertising.
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, advertising is a form of modern art, with artists inspiring their creative ideas to keep a balance between the economic and artistic of their works.
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, advertisements inform us about the choices we have, we have able to compare different types of products from plenty of companies by advertising, choosing the most
product
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 that fits us. Despite of disadvantages above, I strongly consider that some particular advertising aims to persuade people that buying a
product
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 will make them happier and advertisers focus on selling a brand image
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 of letting customers directly know the value of the
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.
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, advertisers often aim their marketing at children, but some advertisements easier influenced children's young minds with wrong knowledge,
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 as violence and porn content. Plus, children will put pressure on parents to buy them things when they immersed themselves in kinds of advertisements for a long time.
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, I strongly believe that advertising make damage many ages of people's emotions and minds, our life will be more comfortable than before when we are without advertising.
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