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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides information
of
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on
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 the
enquiries
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 made by the customer to the Tourist Information office over the span of six
month
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months
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 in the year 2011.
Overall
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, there are three types of
enquiries
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 and
the
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apply
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most of
that is
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 used is by
the
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apply
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telephone and
in person
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in-person
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enquiries
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. In 2011, the two quarters have shown that the
enquiries
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 made by telephone and in person have seen
a
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tremendous growth over the months compared to the
enquiries
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 made by letter or email. It can be seen that letter or email
enquiries
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 have drastically dropped after the second quarter of 2011. Significantly, the growth of the other two
enquiries
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have
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has
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 boosted since
april
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April
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 and by
june
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June
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 they have topped above 1600
enquiries
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.
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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in
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in-person
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person
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,person
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enquiries
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 made by the customers haven't shown any data of
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a drastical
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drastical
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drastic
 drop in the whole six months various compared to the rest of the two
enquiries
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it
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has shown some fall.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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