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some people think healthcare should be free for everyone others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
health
 care becomes a major concern for all
individuals
.
However
, some argue that the
government
 should pay medical
costs
,
while
 others opine
individuals
 should be eligible to pay themselves.
This
 essay intends to analyze both perspectives with my opinion. There are many reasons why
people
 think that medical
costs
 are free for citizens.
Firstly
, in some developing countries, most
of
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people
 cannot able to pay their basic level medical
costs
 which is the reason the
government
 should provide free for them.
Secondly
, all masses pay taxes to the governments, so primary-level medical should be given to all citizens without any objection.
For example
, the
health
 care of the USA introduced a plan for Americans, by which they give free medicines and basic treatments without any charge.
As a result
, it is proved beneficial because lots of
people
 use it, and have seen
health
 improvements.
On the other hand
, those who say
individuals
 should be responsible for their
health
 care argue that advanced medical and crucial treatments are very expensive. If the
government
 pays the medical
costs
 of
individuals
, they will be ready to see a crisis in the economy. The
government
 does not provide basic medical to those, who are earning more than 20000$ annually and any chance
government
 pays for them it would be a big burden on its shoulders. In conclusion,
although
 free medical should be done for everyone, advanced healthcare should be free for only the poor and I am favour in latter notion because it helps millions of
people
.
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