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some people think healthcare should be free for everyone others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
health
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 care becomes a major concern for all
individuals
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.
However
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, some argue that the
government
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 should pay medical
costs
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,
while
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 others opine
individuals
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 should be eligible to pay themselves.
This
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 essay intends to analyze both perspectives with my opinion. There are many reasons why
people
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 think that medical
costs
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 are free for citizens.
Firstly
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, in some developing countries, most
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people
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 cannot able to pay their basic level medical
costs
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 which is the reason the
government
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 should provide free for them.
Secondly
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, all masses pay taxes to the governments, so primary-level medical should be given to all citizens without any objection.
For example
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, the
health
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 care of the USA introduced a plan for Americans, by which they give free medicines and basic treatments without any charge.
As a result
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, it is proved beneficial because lots of
people
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 use it, and have seen
health
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 improvements.
On the other hand
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, those who say
individuals
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 should be responsible for their
health
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 care argue that advanced medical and crucial treatments are very expensive. If the
government
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 pays the medical
costs
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 of
individuals
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, they will be ready to see a crisis in the economy. The
government
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 does not provide basic medical to those, who are earning more than 20000$ annually and any chance
government
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 pays for them it would be a big burden on its shoulders. In conclusion,
although
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 free medical should be done for everyone, advanced healthcare should be free for only the poor and I am favour in latter notion because it helps millions of
people
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.
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