The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar chart provides information on the popularity of four different modes of
transportation
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in one
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city
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in three separate years(1960, 1980, and 2000). Obviously,
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people
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in 1960 used
buses
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the most, the preference turned to
cars
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in 2000. Looking at the data
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1960,
people
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in the
European
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city
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used
buses
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as the most common mode of
transportation
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. Approximately 40
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percent
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of
people
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commuted to work by
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buses
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in that year. Following trains and tubes with around 25
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percent
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of commuters, less than 10
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percent
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of
people
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in the
European
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city
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travelled
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to and from work by
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cars
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car
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. Turning to the data
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2000,
cars
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have become the main
modes
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of
transportation
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during the decades. About 40
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percent
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of
people
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in the
European
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city
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mainly used
cars
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in that year.
On the contrary
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, as time goes by, the popularity of
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have
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declined to fifteen
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percent
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of commuters during the period. Interestingly, Trains and tubes are still made use of stably, regardless of the change between
cars
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and
buses
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.
To sum up
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, the main modes of
transportation
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have changed from
buses
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to
cars
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during the forty years and used subways constantly.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, european, city, people, buses, cars, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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