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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advangtages and disadvantages of giving children in this message?

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In some values, can
children
 can do anything if they try hard enough or not? Here are some advantages and
disvantages
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disadvantages
 of showing
children
this
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these
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 messages
?
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.
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 There are two pros to
children
that
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they
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 can do anything if they try hard enough.
Firstly
, telling
this
 to a kid, it shows a positive reaction. It will show some motivation towards them not to give up and
also
 after hearing it they can be able to achieve long goals as reading long passages or doing maths isn’t easy at all.
Secondly
, telling them to try hard is good as it
help
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 the child to remind themselves that
it
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isit
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 ok it is hard but anything is possible if you try enough and doing your best.
However
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 sometimes, it can be a downfall.
Children
 could not achieve anything because they do not
work
 enough but I think it
because
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is because
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 other people deserve
than
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more than
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 other
children
 as they
work
 harder. Another point
also
, if they
work
 hard they will earn more money but it
maybe
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may be
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 difficult to achieve it. In conclusion, we have to teach
children
 how to
work
 hard and how life works with hard
work
 and motivation and dedication, attitude and time management,
however
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 they must overcome the things that they do not like studying or
tution
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tuition
. if
possibe
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possible
 they can achieve anything, they
be
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are
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 happy and that matter
also
.
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