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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In recent modern society,
people
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 tend to
purchase
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 famous-branded
products
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,
such
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 as garments, vehicles, and so on. In my perspective, some
people
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 think that buying those kinds of stuff could upgrade their social status in the community. By affording some
products
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 from popular
brands
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, which seem luxurious and expensive, the public may think that they have a wealthy life,
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 high taste in their lifestyle.
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, for me,
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 phenomenon is likely
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 a negative development nowadays. There are two main points that base my opinions, which are the economic and social's points of view.
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, from my perspective on the economic aspect,
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 phenomenon may lead to a degradation of the local market. If the public tends to
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 well-known
brands
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, especially from abroad, the local
brands
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 will be lost in
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 competition.
On the other hand
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, the
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 of our domestic
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 have better quality at much more affordable prices than several famous international
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.
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, recently I
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 running shoes that were produced by local entrepreneurs. Compared to my old shoes that I bought when I had a vacation in Singapore, I personally love the local ones because it fits perfectly on my feet and is more comfortable.
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, it is better for us to buy local
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 than foreign
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. My next point of view is based on the social aspect. When
people
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 want to afford famous
products
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, which are high in cost, they will do any endeavour to get the money. Some of my close relatives borrowed a number of cash from me to satisfy their lifestyle. Several
people
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 can pay it back on time, but others have numerous reasons to be late. Personally, I do not respect
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 when they do not be able to keep their promises.
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 situation may lead to disrespect and untrustworthy.
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, I really suggest community to prevent
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 habit because it will loosen their relationship with others. In conclusion, the phenomenon of society
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 likely to
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 expensive well-known
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 may lead to both economic and social aspects. From an economic perspective, it will decrease the local demand. Meanwhile, from a social point of view, it will raise a bad debt habit.
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, I recommend
people
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 buy
products
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 from local
brands
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 at affordable prices,
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 we can save more money for other occasions.
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