Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)
The mortality rate that occurs from
car
accidents
is one of the most significant problems worldwide, especially in Thailand, which has the highest number of driving accidents
in the world. Some people believe that increasing the driver’s
minimum legal age
will help this
issue and increase road
safety. In this
situation, I disagree with this
opinion and expand my reasons to support it.
However
, increasing the driver’s
age
is a good way to avoid car
accidents
. Road
safety is not based on their age
but base on their discipline. For example
, many car
users in Thailand do not follow traffic laws, and car
and motorbike users should reduce their vehicle speed if they are in reduced control areas such
as schools, hospitals, traffic lights, and zebra crossing. As a result
. They hit some people who were crossing a road
. Later, some cases get injured but some cases die. Therefore
, the government should be concerned about this
problem by using the driver’s
law strictly which can reduce the mortality rate from the road
accident.
Moreover
, the driver’s
license is achieved easily because it takes only 15 hours in a driver lesson and the examination tests 3 driving positions with 50 multiple choices. So, this
is one of the major reasons why the vehicle user ignores traffic rules. For instance
, my co-worker ever met in a car
accident in which his car
was hit by a new car
driver who recently got a license for a week and did not beware while
they drove the car
. Therefore
, the official organization should add the qualification that the vehicle users should attend driver lessons for more than 1000 hours and test more driving positions to get these licenses.
In conclusion, I am afraid I have to disagree with increasing the minimum driver’s
age
to improve road
safety and most road
accidents
occur by the no disciplined people who do not follow the law. Therefore
, the government should use the law strictly and the driver’s
qualification should be added.Submitted by kanchanakularathna1991 on
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task achievement
Consider expanding on the sections discussing the effectiveness of education and how better education can shape a more responsible driver. This could enhance the argument against raising the driving age further.
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Provide additional statistics or case studies that explore countries with similar or different age restrictions and their corresponding road safety records. This will further bolster the essay's position.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetitive sentence structures. Varying wording and sentence length can make points more impactful and improve overall readability.
task achievement
The essay clearly presents an argument against raising the driving age, offering logical reasoning with supporting information.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the stance taken in the essay, reinforcing and summarizing the core viewpoints regarding traffic laws and driver education.
coherence cohesion
There is consistent use of examples, such as the anecdote about the colleague's accident, which ties back to the discussion about insufficient driver education requirements.