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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a possitive or a negative development?

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In many nations around the world, the population in
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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 is declining, it is because
people
 are moving from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to urban areas. I believe that
this
 is a negative development.
To begin
 with, the
city
 become dense because of many rural
people
move
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 to the
city
. The more
people
 live in the
city
, the more residential built,
as a
result
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 green land areas are becoming less because it used for housing areas.
Furthermore
, another negative impact is that there are more and more road users.
Consequently
,
a
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traffic congestion is
inevitable
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 problem in the
city
.
In addition
, the negative impact of
aforementioned
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 issue is that economic development in the rural area is decreasing. The reason is that individuals
in
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 productive ages who should work or
open
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 job vacancies
moving
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 to the
city
;
thus
,
people
 who live in the
city
 are only
people
in
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of
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 unproductive ages
such
 as children and senior
citizen
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citizens
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.
To sum up
, I personally think that there are
drawback
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drawbacks
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 developments of rural
people
 moving to the urban area. Those are the density of cities and decreasing
of
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economic growth in the countryside.
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