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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century, and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people
this
 century, and ocean levels are increasing dramatically.
This
 essay will
first
 suggest that the biggest problems caused by
this
 phenomenon are the loss of land and the flooding of homes and
then
 argue that pollution reduction and building
flood
 protection are the most viable solutions. The foremost problems caused by climbing sea levels are that land is being lost and peoples’ residences are often flooded. As
water
 levels rise, low-lying land is submerged and many countries become smaller.
Furthermore
, millions of people all over the world live in coastal areas, and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they are inundated with
water
 and lose their property. The devastation brought about by
this
 was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. Possible solutions to these problems would be to reduce the amount of pollution being created and to build
flood
 barriers. If each person reduces their carbon footprint, the negative effects on the environment will be reduced and
this
 will mean that the
water
 level will stop rising.
Furthermore
,
flood
 defences,
such
 as dikes, dams, and floodgates, could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the
water
reaching
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 populated areas. The Netherlands is one of the most populated areas in the world and
also
 one of the most vulnerable to flooding and they have successfully employed various
flood
 defence systems. To conclude, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is one of the foremost challenges we face and it will ultimately lead to some countries losing landmass and many of the worlds’ cities being left underwater, but possible solutions could be to protect our environment and to utilise the
flood
 prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland.
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