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The diagram below show the process of producing photographs using digital equipments.

The provided diagram illustrates the process of producing photographs using digital equipment
such
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 as a digital
camera
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, computer, and printer. As can be seen from the diagram, there are three stages in the process, beginning with capturing and recording an image using a digital
camera
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 and culminating in printing paper. In the beginning stage, there occur capturing
images
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 using a digital
camera
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, and the
images
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 are stored on a smart card.
Besides
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, recording videos
also
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 can be done using a digital
camera
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 and stored on a smart card. And
then
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, the captured
images
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 are downloaded on a computer.
Next,
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the
images
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 are edited,
such
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 as cutting, improving, and formatting on a computer. The edited
images
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 can be sent by e-mail or stored on CD. In the subsequent stage, the edited
images
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 can be printed on photo paper using a printer. The printed photos can be
color
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colour
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 photos or black-and-white photos.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the ninth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words camera, images with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the ninth paragraph.
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