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This Some people say reading the news on the Internet is better others think news purpose will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Today
internet
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 is the main resource of
news
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. Some
people
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 think that reading
news
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 which is on the
Internet
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 is better.
Other
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 say newspapers will deliver
news
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 which is basic for many
people
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.
To
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 my mind reading
news
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 from
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or magazines more healthy and better than reading them
from
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on
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
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 is the
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 to discuss both views
of
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this
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 topic.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
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 prefer to read some
news
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 on the
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internet
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Internet
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. Nowadays
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internet
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the internet
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 is comfortable and available for reading about things
that
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is
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are
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 happening around the world. But I do not think it is useful for our health. Every time when you see
screen
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the screen
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off
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of
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 your phone your eyes will come across
this
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 Radioactive power. It has
negative
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a negative
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 effect
for
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 vision ability. Some
people
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 will be addicted to reading
news
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 from
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internet
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the internet
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 even when they are working on the street.
This
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 kind of
situations
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situation
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lead
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leads
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increasing
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an increasing
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 number of car accidents. Using newspapers has a lot of benefits,
for
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example
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 government provide
people
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 with work
on
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in
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newspaper
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 factory. It has not any drawbacks I think. As you know
newspaper
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magazine
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magazines
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 as
sthing
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something
thing
 which is created with things that
people
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not
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do not
did not
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 use anymore in
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 process many
people
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 can earn money.
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Secondly
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,Secondly
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newspaper
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 does not damage your health. If you are a person who
live
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lives
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 to collect newspapers
then
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 you can remember every
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news
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piece of news
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 in that
newspaper
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. And some
news
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 on the
internet
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 can be fake. Now many
people
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 earn money from remain fake
news
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 to
people
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 but
newspaper
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 never show you fake
news
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.
Important
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The important
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 thing is that some children can learn how to read if they do not go to school. The
news
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 from
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is important
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up
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 using
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 to read
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news
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the news
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 has lots of good points that read
it
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apply
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from the
internet
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internet
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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