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Do you agree that virtual reality will help the development of society?

#reality #development #society
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Virtual
reality
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 has been giving numerous benefits in so many areas, helping society to enhance the quality of their lives. The presence of virtual
reality
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 is a game changer in some fields of study and careers. I strongly agree with
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 statement and will give some of the reasons and samples ,especially in the medical and architecture area. As we have known that doctors and medical students have been using plastic models or cadavers for surgical training a long time ago, but these kinds of methods are gradually changing
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 the quality of virtual
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 development is constantly improving. It is unethical to use a living human to see the impact of surgery in the training
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 considering that the trainee might be making a failure during the practice. With virtual
reality
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, you don't have to worry about making any mistakes, you just learn from them and move on. Architects used to produce an architectural building manually with their own ability
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 as hand drawing and material calculation which was ineffective since there was
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 an inevitable mistake during the
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. The main reason why virtual
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 is a blessing is that it can produce a fast and accurate presentation, measurement and calculation. Simulating a real-life experience to design a space,
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 technology will enable the client to get a comprehensive vision of how the space would be before it will be constructed. Not only for the design
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 but,
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 technology can
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 simulate the construction
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 from the very beginning until the end of the stage. With these examples mentioned, I absolutely agree that Virtual
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 will help the development of society, and will continue to expand its benefits to enhance the quality of life as its constant advancement over time.
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