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the tables show how many interntational students studies in Canada and the United States by country of origin

the tables show how many interntational students studies in Canada and the United States by country of origin
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The two tables compare the total number of international
students
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 in
Canada
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 and the United States of America (USA) by nationalities/country of origin in 2002 and 2003.
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, it was apparent that the USA had more enlistments from around the world than
Canada
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,
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Canada
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 had more growth in the
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 of global recruitments mentioned in the period of time. In 2002, Indians were the most dominant schoolfellows in the United States with a total of 200,000 people, almost half of the total international
students
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 in the states.
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 in the next year, it decreased by nine per cent to 182,000, and Indians were still number one in the population. After that, the country had Chinese
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 for about 110,000 persons and had raised to 166,600 by 2003. In third place, the USA
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 had
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 from
Canada
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, which increased in 2003 from 31,000 to 33,170.
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,
Canada
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 from China as the first rank in terms of the total statistic and it had jumped from 5400 to 7850. The American
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 came to second place, from 5000 in 2002 to 5450 by 2003.
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, Indian
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 in
Canada
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 were only 2100 in 2002 and grew by 35% in 2003.
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