Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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The expanding population and today's competitive industry have been demanding more fuel
sources
such
as
gas
and
oil
at an increasing rate across the globe.
This
has led inevitably to look for new
oil
and
gas
sources
and occupy remote
areas
.
This
situation has more disadvantages from different perspectives, and
this
essay demonstrates
firstly
the damages that can arise during the
oil
or
gas
production process by following an analysis of the disadvantages of moving untouched regions. The mean downbreak of finding new
sources
in remote
areas
is environmental damage. Drawing
oil
out from
sources
has a couple of stages and all of them affect local flora and fauna in different ways.
Firstly
, the noise of
this
process creates obstacles to live sensitive animals, likely dolphins, and whales in
this
part of the ocean.
Moreover
, the accidents in the
oil
industry have polluted heavily certain
areas
which cause dead local flora and fauna .
For example
, an accident in the stage of transportation in 2016 destroyed the ecological balance in more than 70 hectares of the Caribbean Sea.
In addition
, the occupation of uninhabited regions results in other disadvantages. Finding new
oil
and
gas
sources
also
brings the families
together with
industry employees to new regions,
thus
building new residential
areas
.
This
means destroying the local natural environment for the construction of suburbs and cities.
Therefore
, wild animals can not find sufficient
areas
for food and living. In conclusion, there are inevitable downbreaks to ecology by finding new
oil
and
gas
sources
and occupation untouched
areas
.
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