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Technological and scientific advances are changing the food people eat. Some believe that these are changes can be harmful to the health of the people. Others challenge this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, science and technology have been incorporated in many aspects of our dietary intake and it includes many types of processed
food
.
This
 issue is controversial as some people believe that these products can negatively impact one's health
although
, others think it is not completely true. I believe that certain categories of
food
 can be unhealthy and have
long term
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 implications. Technology has changed our view of
food
 in the
last
 decade.
Inspite
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In spite
 of the presence of various groups of processed
food
, it is advised by some people
to
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avoid it, and
this
 can be because of the taste
inhancers
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enhancers
 and the preservatives used in many types of
our
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day-to-day
food
 which can predispose various allergies and diseases.
For example
, various cheese industries use certain ingredients
such
 as aspartame and unsaturated fats to make it
last
 longer
in contrast
 with pure fresh cheese which has a
short term
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 expiry date.
Moreover
, some of these preservatives can be carcinogenic.
Therefore
, some initiatives advertise against certain chemicals when used in certain amounts or advise manufacturers about certain limits It is
also
 common among people to choose those processed foods as the fast-paced life sometimes entails some to consider those varied types of foods.
For instance
, ready-made sandwiches can have a long life span which can be suitable for working professionals when stored correctly.
Consequently
, it can be convenient for certain individuals to choose
this
 as an alternative that matches their own requirements. In conclusion, technological progress in the
food
 industry has made life more convenient for consumers.
However
, some of those advances can have lifelong effects on individuals.
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