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Today people are living in a throwaway society where they use things for a short time only and then throw them away. What are the causes of this and what problems can it lead to?

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In recent modern society, people are likely to use their belongings temporarily. The main cause of
this
 phenomenon is the fascinating trend of consumerism and the desire of people to follow it.
Therefore
, it may lead to unwanted waste that will pollute the environment.
For instance
, the hottest topic related to
this
 situation is
fashion
. A previous survey, conducted in 2020 by a private non-government organization concerned with fast
fashion
, showed that a
fashion
 brand can release new wide-ranging clothing styles, up to five different kinds of garments, every season. On the same page, a recent study by Padjadjaran University found that three of five Bandung citizens change their wardrobe every 3 months on average.
In addition
 to
this
 research, half of the correspondents said that the uncomfortable feeling of being missed out on up-to-date trends may lead to
this
 habit.
This
 problem comes with serious consequences as well. Based on the data from the Department of Environment showed that 10,000 tonnages of dumped garbage in Leuwigajah are dominated by textile wastes. Since the early 2000s,
this
 number has grown gradually and is projected to rise in the following decades. If
this
 situation is not managed wisely by the stakeholders, it may lead to severe environmental issues in the future. In conclusion, the problem regarding massive consumption habits in
this
 current society is mainly caused by the marketing of the
fashion
 industries and followed by high demand from the public.
Consequently
,
this
 phenomenon will impact nature, if the government and followed by the community as well do not take wise responsible for it.
Thus
,
this
 essay suggests that every part of society should have a significant role to counter
this
 issue.
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