The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese.

The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese.
The given figure shows the general steps in producing softer variants of
cheese
. As can be seen from the diagram, the
process
consists of 5 steps with two types of general action done which is mixing and heating the liquid
mixture
until it became
thick
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a thick
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liquid
that is
known as a soft
cheese
.
At the first stage
of
process
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the process
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, a
mixture
of water and milk is created before being cooled down. The
mixture
temperature
is brought down by placing them in
a
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storage with
the
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a
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temperature
of 5 degrees
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celsius
for two hours. After the
mixture
is cool enough, salt is added before the
mixture
is fermented at
a
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room
temperature
for the same duration as the cooling
process
. As the soft
cheese
need
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needs
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to be quite thick, the
moisture
in the
mixture
is evaporated by putting them
in
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at
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a boiling
temperature
of 100
celcius
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celsius
for eight hours.
This
process
let the
moisture
to
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turn into steam which will let the worker separate the unneeded
moisture
easily.
Finally
, the
mixture
is entering the
last
step which is a simultaneous step of second cooling and filtration to separate the evaporated
moisture
and soft
cheese
that
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which
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is possible to do because of the preceding
process
.
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