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The chart below shows what Anthropology gradutes from one university did after finishing their undergradute degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology gradutes from one university did after finishing their undergradute degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
#anthropology #gradutes #university #undergradute #course #salaries #anthropologists #work #five #years
The provided pie chart illustrates the information
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 one
unviersity's
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university's
university
 Anthropology department student's working status
while
 the table showed the salary ranges of graduate
students
 in
last
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the last
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 five years. In a nutshell, among
others
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,others
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 52% of the
students
 had
full time
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job
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jobs
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.
After
this
, 15%
students
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of students
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 were having
part time
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 work. Surprisingly, 12%
students
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of students
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 are doing nothing. 8% of the
students
 went for their
postgrade
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postgrad
postgrads
postgraduate
.
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 percentage belonged to
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which
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in which
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 we were unable to know what they did.
Rest
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 5%
students
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of students
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 were engaged with
part time
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part-time
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job
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jobs
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 and
simultaneouly
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simultaneously
 busy with their
study
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studies
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.
In addition
, the table focused on
salary
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the salary
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 level of the
gradute
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graduate
students
.
Students
 who worked in
a
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the
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 government sector earned
highest
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the highest
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 in the section of $100,00 and above
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then
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the
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 other two sectors. The rate was 50%.
On the other hand
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who
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those who
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 were busy with freelance consultation earned the second highest in
$
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75000-100000 and above range. The percentage was 40%. In private companies,
Anthropologist
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Anthropologists
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 earned the third highest which was 35%, in the range of $50000-$99,999.
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