The chart below shows what Anthropology gradutes from one university did after finishing their undergradute degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology gradutes from one university did after finishing their undergradute degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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unviersity's
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university's
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Anthropology department student's working status
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the table showed the salary ranges of graduate
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five years. In a nutshell, among
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52% of the
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job
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, 15%
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were having
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work. Surprisingly, 12%
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are doing nothing. 8% of the
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went for their
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percentage belonged to
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we were unable to know what they did.
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5%
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students
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were engaged with
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job
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and
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simultaneously
busy with their
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studies
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, the table focused on
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level of the
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graduate
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Students
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who worked in
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government sector earned
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in the section of $100,00 and above
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other two sectors. The rate was 50%.
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were busy with freelance consultation earned the second highest in
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75000-100000 and above range. The percentage was 40%. In private companies,
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earned the third highest which was 35%, in the range of $50000-$99,999.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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