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Young adults are now choosing to wait until later in life, often until they are in their 30s, to settle down and get married. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays
people
 are taking their own sweet time before settling for marriage and having kids as
people
 have become more career oriented and want to first live as an independent individual. Young women want to stand on their own feet or earn for themselves, want to accomplish their dreams and establish themselves with their own identity but,
this
not
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 the only case with just women, men
also
 want the same thing. Most
people
are
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get married in their 30s,
this
 can have both its pros and cons. The advantage
are
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people
 are not getting frustrated with their lives as in earlier days,
people
 used to get married in their 20s and at times they were not able to figure out themselves or rather say they were never given a chance to. But now a lot of things have changed over
the
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time,
people
 have become confident individuals ready to make their own decisions and some are ready to even conquer the world and that stops them from getting married so early.
This
also
 has some disadvantages
as well as
 they are getting married late, they are
also
 having a child late than usual, so by the time they get retired the kids are still studying either in school or college and because of
this
 they need to save and plan their future very carefully.
To conclude
,
this
 is not a very serious issue or rather it depends on a person’s perspective on whether they want to get married in their 20s or 30s. Society can find the solution to
this
 problem very easily
although
 they need to be a little cooperative about things.
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