Some People argue that competitive sports are good for bringing together people from different cultures. Others argue that these sports can cause problems and increase conflicts between nations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is true that some
people
think by doing competition of sports have a good impact on gaining people
from another cultures
, but Replace the adjective
another culture
other cultures
the
Correct article usage
apply
other
argue that Correct pronoun usage
others
these event
can make issues and rise conflicts with other nations. It seems to me that Change the determiner
this event
these events
exercises
tournament can be Correct article usage
an exercises
benefit
for individuals who join it, Replace the word
beneficial
while
it will be challenging for nations who are not sportive.
On the one hand, each culture can meet up together in a place that
they join the contests of sports and it Correct word choice
where
bring
Change the verb form
brings
a
benefit for every single person. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, candidate
can get Fix the agreement mistake
candidates
a
new Correct article usage
apply
friend
from Fix the agreement mistake
friends
the
other background, especially Correct article usage
apply
nation
. Fix the agreement mistake
nations
For example
, they can learn about the culture from
their enemy during Change preposition
of
the
break time. Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, people
can sharing
about their Change the verb form
share
be sharing
history
Change the noun form
histories
such
as food, traditional clothers
, and language. Correct your spelling
clothes
This
is
will Unnecessary verb
apply
be continue
until their exchange their social media as Instagram, Facebook and Twitter. Change the verb form
continue
Finally
, people
get more knowledge from others. It be
useful not only for competitive, but Change the verb form
is
also
get a new learning.
On the other hand
, this
is going to be an impact for
participant who does not have Change preposition
on
ability
of Add an article
the ability
sportivitas
. In Correct your spelling
sportives
this
case, they don't accept their defeat from their rival. This
is
will make a conflict with Unnecessary verb
apply
other country
that become a bad relationship. Change the wording
another country
other countries
Moreover
, if both of them do not have a good relation
before. Replace the word
relationship
In addition
, when the other event comes, might be a country who
Correct pronoun usage
that
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
a
trouble will not join follow for two times. Remove the article
apply
Subsequently
, candidates does
not have a good connection with other. Change the verb form
do
Consequently
, their
do not know each other who Correct pronoun usage
they
are
the best person that expert in it. Undeniably, it Change the verb form
is
wil
Correct your spelling
will
be rise
Change the verb form
be risen
be rising
Change preposition
to the
the
conflict between countries just Correct article usage
apply
because
the character.
In conclusion, in my Add the preposition
ofbecause
viewpoint
there are advantages of it to bring a new moment for each other. Unfortunately, it will be an effect for countries to increase the bad relationship when the games Add a comma
,viewpoint
is
not doing bad to one side from Change the verb form
are
an
country.Correct your spelling
another
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