Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about whether should inhabitants join in
team
sports rather than individual sports. While
solo exercises can help people to reshape their body
efficiently, I still agree that not only can Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
team
activities strengthen humans’
Change noun form
humans
physique
but Fix the agreement mistake
physiques
also
it can reinforce ability
of teamwork which has participated an important part in human development.
There are two main reasons why it could be argued that dwellers can gain more benefits by having motions alone. Add an article
the ability
Firstly
, exercising by oneself will establish an environment which avoid
others disturbance. Change the verb form
avoids
For example
, individuals who are doing sport
in gyms do not need to communicate with strangers, which can make them Fix the agreement mistake
sports
focusing
on strengthening themselves. Change the form of the verb
focus
Secondly
, it is convenient that doing
sport by oneself. In Wrong verb form
do
this
fast-paced society, personal time is occupied by commuting or trivial works
, which means that it is Fix the agreement mistake
work
hardly
to gather a group of teammates who have similar Replace the word
hard
interest
. For those individuals, solo motions Fix the agreement mistake
interests
trend
to Correct your spelling
tend
the
only way to entertainment.
Add a missing verb
be the
Nevertheless
, team
sports play a significant role in the history of mankind. For one thing, doing motions together can improve the ability of
Change preposition
to
cooperation
. Replace the word
cooperate
For instance
, the members in
a Change preposition
of
team
game always have different duties, which are decided by their own capacities, helping them to improve their collaboration. Secondly
, dwellers can meet more different friends by
those physical activities which will expand their social circle Change preposition
through
that
totally consist of strangers who have Correct pronoun usage
which
same
hobbies and teamwork skills.
In conclusion, companies and governments have higher Correct article usage
the same
require
Replace the word
requirements
about
their employees’ cooperative ability in Change preposition
for
this
globalizing world which means individuals should spend more time to take
part in group activities.Change the verb form
taking
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