Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. But others think taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether should inhabitants join in
team
sports rather than individual sports.
While
solo exercises can help people to reshape their
body
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efficiently, I still agree that not only can
team
activities strengthen
humans’
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physique
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but
also
it can reinforce
ability
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of teamwork which has participated an important part in human development. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that dwellers can gain more benefits by having motions alone.
Firstly
, exercising by oneself will establish an environment which
avoid
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others disturbance.
For example
, individuals who are doing
sport
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in gyms do not need to communicate with strangers, which can make them
focusing
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on strengthening themselves.
Secondly
, it is convenient that
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sport by oneself. In
this
fast-paced society, personal time is occupied by commuting or trivial
works
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, which means that it is
hardly
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to gather a group of teammates who have similar
interest
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. For those individuals, solo motions
trend
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to
the
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only way to entertainment.
Nevertheless
,
team
sports play a significant role in the history of mankind. For one thing, doing motions together can improve the ability
of
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cooperation
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.
For instance
, the members
in
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a
team
game always have different duties, which are decided by their own capacities, helping them to improve their collaboration.
Secondly
, dwellers can meet more different friends
by
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those physical activities which will expand their social circle
that
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totally consist of strangers who have
same
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hobbies and teamwork skills. In conclusion, companies and governments have higher
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about
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their employees’ cooperative ability in
this
globalizing world which means individuals should spend more time
to take
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part in group activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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