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Some people believe that the climate of a country has the greatest influence on its culture (e.g. food, arts, music, clothing). Others believe that there are more important influences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For thousands of years, humans had to endure the harsh environment to survive in their homeland. Some
people
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 believe that the
climate
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 is the biggest factor that impacts how
people
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 live their
life
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 and eventually creates what we know as cultures.
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, others believed that there are other
factors
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 that influence the
culture
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, like
history
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 and
religion
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.
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 essay will discuss both views and present my opinion on that matter. On the one hand, the
climate
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 of a country can have a significant impact on its
culture
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 as it is impacting many
factors
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 that might ensure the survivability of a species,
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availability
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the availability
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 of food, shelter, or protection from harsh environments.
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,
people
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 who live in cold climates might have liked
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 meals as it provides energy, or thicker outfits to stay warm,
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people
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 in the warmer areas may have developed ways to process watery food and outfits that are made from light materials to stay hydrated.
On the other hand
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, there are different
factors
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 that might have
also
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 contributed to the way
people
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 live,
such
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 as
history
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 or
religion
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.
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,
history
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 can influence
the
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apply
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culture
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 through the way
people
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 communicate
that
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which
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create
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creates
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 different types of languages around the world, or
religion
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 that influences how
people
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 behave and interact with each other,
thus
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 affecting their beliefs and
behavior
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behaviour
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. In my opinion, the
climate
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 is one of the most important
factors
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 that influences
culture
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 as humans have lived for thousands of years and the way they handle the
climate
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 in order to survive will ultimately define the
culture
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 itself.
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, we cannot deny that other
factors
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 like
history
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 or
religion
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also
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 contribute to diversifying the numbers of existing cultures in the world nowadays.
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