You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given flowchart illustrates the steps involved in the production of
milk
and other dairy
products
. Broadly, the process is fairly simple where the work is done mostly by machines with very little human input involved in delivering the final
milk
products
to consumers.
First
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the cows are left to graze on grass fields, which is their primary source of nutrition.
Thereafter
, milking machines are used twice a day to
milk
the cows, and the
milk
so collected is refrigerated so that it can be stored to protect it from getting spoiled.
Next,
it is lucid from the chart that a
milk
tanker delivers
the
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fresh
milk
to dairy every day. Once the
milk
reaches the dairy, a multitude of machines are deployed which
segregates
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the raw
milk
into two portions, one of which is utilized to manufacture
milk
products
, which are cheese, cream and butter. The remaining quantity of
milk
is pasteurized and packed into containers. These final
products
are
then
taken to supermarkets and shops from where the customers can pick them up from the shelves.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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