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People should be allowed to obscure their identity online. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #identity
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Over the
last
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 two or three years, the way
people
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 use the internet has changed dramatically.
As a result
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, a growing number of
people
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 try to hide their personalities on social
media
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 platforms. I totally disagree with
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 point of view because for
people
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 using social
media
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 for real identity is crucial for relatives or friends to know better and express the reality of the person. To start with, the reason why
people
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 should be clear about their reality on social
media
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 platforms is that it shows their real personality. These days
people
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 know each other more by their identification online rather than by communicating because most individuals spend more time scrolling their phones than talking to others.
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, if you post or comment on something on social
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, it would be shown to friends following you, and they form an image of you
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.
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, if somebody is using the internet with a fake identity and posting bad things,
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 it could be beneficial for him because he will be unnoticed by his knowns. Another worth considering point is the increase in crimes and suicide rates. They should not be allowed to hide their identity because some
people
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 misuse
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 opportunity and blackmail innocent
people
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 for money or personal issues which may lead to crime or unwanted decisions.
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, a piece of news was posted in the newspaper
last
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 week where a businessman was blackmailed by a kidnapper and he demanded a huge amount of money
otherwise
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 he could have harmed his family.
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, these kinds of problems are arising because
people
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 are not showing who they are and taking advantage of being unknown.
To conclude
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,
people
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 must show their real personalities on the internet and they should not be allowed to be unreal because it can increase crime issues and can prevent
people
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 from being who they are in real.
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