Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebration, while others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
One of the social concerns today relates to spending
money
on family celebration
. Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
While
it is often argued that it is important to spend a lot
of money
on family celebration
, others believe it is a waste of Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
money
. Actually, some celebration
can help family Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
members
link together but too many party
once Change to a plural noun
parties
years
can make Fix the agreement mistake
year
our
become poor quickly, I agree Correct pronoun usage
us
spending
Change the verb form
to spend
money
on family clebration
unless burning Correct your spelling
celebrations
money
.
On the one hand, it is argued that spending a lot
of money
on family celebration
is really crucial. The main reason is that Family Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
celebration
can be lookalike a good way to link Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
members
of family
. It is Add an article
the family
a family
also
possible to say that today when the social is increasing quickly everyone seem
to be too busy to have a meal with their family, they even never do it unless some special Change the verb form
seems
celebration
of family. For instance
, my uncle who is living in USA
hardly Correct article usage
the USA
go
back to Viet Nam visit family unless some Change the verb form
goes
family’s
special Change noun form
family
celebration
like feast
or wedding of a member. Another reason is spending Correct article usage
a feast
money
on that celebration
can be lookalike an occasion for famiy
Correct your spelling
family
members
to entertain and relax together. For example
, according to
a
cultural and geography research about West South Viet Nam people which Correct article usage
apply
is perform
by 4 students of Vietnamese Scientific Study, they give Change the verb form
is performed
some
information that in West South Viet Nam people usually celebrate Correct quantifier usage
apply
birthday
and feasts not only Fix the agreement mistake
birthdays
to
ancestor remembrance or happy Change preposition
for
birthday
their family members
but also
to relax and entertain together.
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed by others that family celebration
is really too wasted and so unecessary
. People often have Correct your spelling
unnecessary
this
opinion because for rich man a lot
of money
seem
to be too short to make them feel regret, Change the verb form
seems
however
for the poor
it’s Add a comma
,poor
Correct article usage
an unacepted
unacepted
thing, for rich man a Correct your spelling
unaccepted
lot
of money
is
spent on Unnecessary verb
apply
celebration
can be only a tool to entertain but the poor look it alike a large money
which they can only see in dream
. In fact, Add an article
a dream
the dream
poor
Add an article
the poor
a poor
man
really Fix the agreement mistake
men
have
more Change the verb form
has
thing
Fix the agreement mistake
things
Fix the infinitive
to have
have
to spend cash like hospital Unnecessary verb
apply
fee
, tuition Fix the agreement mistake
fees
fee
or Fix the agreement mistake
fees
tax
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taxes
althought
their salary is too short and they seem can’t Correct your spelling
although
pay
for it .A particularly good example here is Fix the infinitive
to pay
last
swing I had a charity journey with school and that gave me a memorable opportunity to talk to the poor live
in our province, for them having a Replace the word
living
Birthday
with a cake seem just can appear when they fall into a beautiful dream, it’s too difficult with their short money
, in their village birthday
or another family party is only an
usual day.
In conclusion, Change the article
a
celebration
of Add an article
a celebration
the celebration
family
is believed to be crucial by someone, for Add an article
the family
a family
others
it is Add a comma
,others
money-wasted
.Personally, I tend to believe that some Correct your spelling
money wasted
celebration
can help family Fix the agreement mistake
celebrations
members
link together but too many party
once Fix the agreement mistake
parties
Correct article usage
a years
years
can make Fix the agreement mistake
year
our
become poor quickly, I agree Correct pronoun usage
us
spending
Change the verb form
to spend
money
on family clebration
unless burning Correct your spelling
celebration
money
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