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Some people think sending criminals to prison is an effective way to deal with them. Others think education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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.A group of
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 claims the most effective way is
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 them to learn
education
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.
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 believe that
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criminals
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 should
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 to jail.In my view,
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 should have access to
education
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 and learn employability
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 during
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 of imprisonment,
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criminals
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 who had committed a serious and unforgivable
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 should be deprived of
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 right. On the one hand,
education
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 is a positive method to encourage
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criminals
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 and train them to live in normal life.It can provide
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 chance to
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a criminal
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criminal
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criminals
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 who made a mistake in a moment of
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confusion
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,
criminals
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 can learn employability
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 in prison
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 they can start a new life after
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 of imprisonment with their
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.
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,
education
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 can reduce the rate of
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crime
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supposed
people
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that people
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 who had doing illegal activities before will commit
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crime
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 but
education
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 can prevent it.
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,
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 is not suitable
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 every
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criminals
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criminal
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 especially
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criminals
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 who had
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a murder
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 or other serious
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crime
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crimes
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.They usually have some mental problem so
education
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 can’t help them to change their mind,and mental problem is difficult to treat.
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,
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 them will let society
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dangerous
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such
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 as they killed
other
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others
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 again.In
these situation
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,prison is suitable for them,it is
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a low
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low cost
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 method,and they will
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 control to prevent the possibility of them
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further
harm
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 others.
To
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 conclusion,
education
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 is suitable for
criminal
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criminals
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 who commit slight
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crime
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crimes
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 like
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item
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items
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 from
shop
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.It can help them integrate into society after punishment.
Prison
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also
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an
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indispensable where to control
criminals
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 who will hurt
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others
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 again.I believe combining these two approaches is the best
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solution
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