Research show that overeating is as harmful ask smoking. Therefore, advertising for certain food products should be banned, in the same way as cigarette advertising is banned in many countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is argued that certain
food
such
as hamburgers or fried potation should be forbidden to advertise just like
cigarette
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since they both have negative impacts on people’s
health
. I completely agree with
this
statement because
this
may improve
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publics’
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health
condition and alleviate
national
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the national
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financial burden. The primary reason why
prohibition
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the prohibition
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of advertising those unhealthy
food
makes sense is that it prevents people from developing diseases
such
as obesity, diabetes or
hypertensions
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hypertension
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, which are deeply associated with their eating habits. advertisements published on social media
is
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are
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considered as the main cause of purchasing.
For example
, many youngsters claim that those promotional images make them compulsively buy junk
food
because they appear so delicious
while
they can only get
disappointment
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when they get real
one
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. If
such
false
delicacy
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could be banned by governments,
the
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apply
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consumption would drop and people’s
health
may ameliorate. The second main reason why
such
ban
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is worthy is that it contributes to
reduce
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reducing
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financial
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the financial
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costs of nations
on
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in
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healthcare
area
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areas
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.
Although
, certain companies can make profits
by
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from
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such
advertisement
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advertisements
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and pay higher
tax
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taxes
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, eventually, the deterioration of
health
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the health
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of citizens would force governments to pay more
on
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for
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medical services.
For instance
, until 2018, in
United
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Kingdom, over a third of people
is
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are
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suffering from diseases related to overeating and the expenditure on corresponding
treat
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occupies a big portion of national tax income. By forbidding these promotions,
government
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the government
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may be able to save more money. In conclusion, I believe that governments should ban
those advertisement
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that advertisement
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for
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apply
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promoting unhealthy
food
because people can be healthier by keeping away from false-yummy products and government expenses can be reduced
due to
the improvement of citizens’
health
.
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