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Many people think that museums and art galleries should only show work from local artist rather than work from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #museums #art #galleries #show #work #artist #countries
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At present, a lot of individuals believe that
museums
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galleries
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 must only
show
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work
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 from local
artists
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 rather than
work
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 from other
countries
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. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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 because
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 will educate
tourists
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 about their cultures and improve the economy. One reason why
museums
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 and
galleries
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 must only
show
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work
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 from local
artists
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 rather than
work
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 from other
countries
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 is that a lot of
tourists
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 come to the
country
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 to see the
museums
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, so the
galleries
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 should put every local artist for
tourists
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 to see their
culture
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 and learn a lot of information about
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country
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,
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, when people go to
Yemen
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 for tourism, they want to see their
museums
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 and
galleries
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 especially
Yemen
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's
culture
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,
as a result
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, it is not important to put some
artists
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 from other
countries
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 since they come to
Yemen
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 to see the
culture
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 of
Yemen
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.
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,
museums
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 and
galleries
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 ought to be only for local
artists
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 because when some
museums
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 and
galleries
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 put
artists
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 from other
countries
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this
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 is considered theft,
For instance
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, when
museums
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 put
artists
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 from other
countries
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tourists
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 who come to these
museums
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 do not want to travel to another
country
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 to see the
museums
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 since already have
artists
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 from
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country
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 so that will be bad for the economy of tourist
country
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 because people should not go to their counties to see
museums
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 since it can find it in other counties.
To sum up
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,
museums
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 and
galleries
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 should
show
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 only local
artists
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 rather than
work
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 from other
countries
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 to
show
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 the
tourists
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 their
culture
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 and improve the economy.
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