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Many people think that museums and art galleries should only show work from local artist rather than work from other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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At present, a lot of individuals believe that
museums
 and
galleries
 must only
show
work
 from local
artists
 rather than
work
 from other
countries
. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 because
this
 will educate
tourists
 about their cultures and improve the economy. One reason why
museums
 and
galleries
 must only
show
work
 from local
artists
 rather than
work
 from other
countries
 is that a lot of
tourists
 come to the
country
 to see the
museums
, so the
galleries
 should put every local artist for
tourists
 to see their
culture
 and learn a lot of information about
this
country
,
For example
, when people go to
Yemen
 for tourism, they want to see their
museums
 and
galleries
 especially
Yemen
's
culture
,
as a result
, it is not important to put some
artists
 from other
countries
 since they come to
Yemen
 to see the
culture
 of
Yemen
.
Secondly
,
museums
 and
galleries
 ought to be only for local
artists
 because when some
museums
 and
galleries
 put
artists
 from other
countries
this
 is considered theft,
For instance
, when
museums
 put
artists
 from other
countries
tourists
 who come to these
museums
 do not want to travel to another
country
 to see the
museums
 since already have
artists
 from
this
country
 so that will be bad for the economy of tourist
country
 because people should not go to their counties to see
museums
 since it can find it in other counties.
To sum up
,
museums
 and
galleries
 should
show
 only local
artists
 rather than
work
 from other
countries
 to
show
 the
tourists
 their
culture
 and improve the economy.
Submitted by s_syedy on

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