You live with a roommate at university, but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate. Write a letter to an administrator at your university and include: Who you are The problem What you suggest they do

Dear Mr R, I hope
this
letter finds you in radiant health and in the best of spirits. Myself Lisa, a first-year student in the pharmacy department. Currently, I am residing in Carjon Hall and sharing my room with another student from the university. As I got admission at the
last
moment
so
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I did not get the room in the Bpharm Hall. My roommate is from the English department.
To begin
with, I was not able to sleep properly the
last
week, because my roommate watches movies late at night and the volume is high.
Due to
lacking
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sleep, I am not able to concentrate on my
study
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studies
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and it is known
to
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you
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how much study pressure I
am
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to take in pharmacy subject.
Apart from
this
, I talked with the girl and she did not cooperate with me.
Hence
, it will be great if you come forward to tackle the situation.
In addition
, you can tell her that she can use a headphone
while
enjoying a movie as I do not have any problem with light. I await your response and let me know if you have any concerns. Yours faithfully, L
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task response
Ensure to clearly state the suggested course of action in response to the problem outlined.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content with clearer paragraphing and use appropriate transitional words and phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • residential advisor
  • disruptive
  • concentration
  • mediation
  • compliance
  • amicable
  • tenable
  • rectify
  • study habits
  • commons area
  • quiet hours
  • academic achievement
  • cohabitation
  • lifestyle conflict
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