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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who used to eat junk food at restaurants in several periods 2003, 2006 and 2013. it is clear from the graph that the ratio of the population who tends to eat weekly is the highest out of all the categories,
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 every day is the lowest at 8.5%
overall
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.
according to
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 what is shown, there is an apparent comparability between weekly and One or twice a month which represents almost the same proportion.
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, Every Day and Never show a steady-state ratio of 8.5 and 11, respectively.
last
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 but not least, Several times a week and A few times a year are the averages between both weekly, Once or twice a month and Every day, Never at 15 to 20 in proportion.
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, there is an evident fluctuation in the Several times a week category. In conclusion, residents who used to eat fast-food in both Once a week and Once or twice a month can easily encourage them selfs to stop eating these types of foods and try to eliminate
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 bad habit.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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