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The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009

The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009
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The two
maps
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illustrates
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illustrate
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 how the ground floor of a library changed during 8 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was
considerable
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considerably
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changed
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change
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 there are new
sections
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was
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apply
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introudce
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introduced
introduce
 namely, kitchen, law, and economics, and
also
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children
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children's
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 books ,
filme
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films
 and DVDS and computers.
Furthermore
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,
also
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 some places
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are stil
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stil
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still
 unchanged namely,
stairs
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the stairs
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,
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the librarians
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librarians
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librarian's
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 desk, and
entrance
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the entrance
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. Looking at the two
maps
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 in more detail,
in
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at
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bottom
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the bottom
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 of
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the maps
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maps
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map
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 stairs ,
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the librarians
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librarians
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librarian's
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 desk,
entrance
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and entrance
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are
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is
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 remain unaltered. In the
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centre
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center
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,center
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 the number of tables was decreased from 8 to 4 tables, but the areas of tables
was
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were
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 increased.
In
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On
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 the right
side
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,side
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 the newspapers and periodicals
was
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were
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 changed into filme and DVDS, and under the
filme
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film
 and
DVDS
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,DVDS
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 the computers
was
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were
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 added. Regarding
others
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other
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sections
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, in the lift of the
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maps
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,maps
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 the history
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sections
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section
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was transfer
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was transferred
was transferring
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 into four
sections
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 including, kitchen, law, and economics, and
also
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 the
self help
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self-help
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 transfer from life
bottom
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 to
this
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 section. In
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bottom
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the bottom
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 lift the
self help
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self-help
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 replaced with
histroy
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history
 and fiction,
the
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and the
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 history transfer from
top
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the top
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 of the map to
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bottom
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the bottom
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 and similar
for
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to
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fiction
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the fiction
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 section.
In
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On
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 top of
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the map
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map
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,map
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 the fiction section
redevelopmented
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was redevelopmented
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to
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into
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children
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children's
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 books.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words maps, sections, bottom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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