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maps
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how the ground floor of a library changed during 8 years.
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illustrate
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there was considerable
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considerably
changed
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change
sections
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introudce
namely, kitchen, law, and economics, and Correct your spelling
introduced
introduce
also
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children's
filme
and DVDS and computers. Correct your spelling
films
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some places Add a missing verb
are stil
stil
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still
stairs
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the stairs
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the librarians
librarians
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librarian's
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.
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at
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the bottom
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librarian's
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and entrance
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remain unaltered. In the Change the verb form
is
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centre
center
the number of tables was decreased from 8 to 4 tables, but the areas of tables Add a comma
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increased. Change the verb form
were
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the right Change preposition
On
side
the newspapers and periodicals Add a comma
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changed into filme and DVDS, and under the Change the verb form
were
filme
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film
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was
added.
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were
others
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other
sections
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sections
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was transferred
was transferring
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self-help
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the bottom
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self-help
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and fiction, Correct your spelling
history
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the top
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the bottom
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to
fiction
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the fiction
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On
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into
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children's
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words maps, sections, bottom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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