The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
The line graph reveals the enquiry number made by tourists at the Tourist Information in one city from January to June 2011.
Overall
, among the available channels used for
enquiries
, tourists prefer asking questions in person most when compared to those made by letter or email, and telephone. It is clearly seen that written
enquiries
made during the
survey
gradually drop
in contrast
to those from the other two channels.
To begin
with, at the start of the
survey
in January, tourists walked in to make
enquiries
at 400 and rose to over 1800
at the end
of the
survey
in June.
Next,
similarly
, telephone questions were made at around 900 in the first month but fell to 800 before bouncing back to remain at 1000 in March and April. Despite the rise, the number of inquiries made via telephone could not rival those made in person, accounting for 1600
enquiries
in June.
Lastly
,
although
the written
enquiries
were made at approximately 800 in January, it went down slightly to less than 600 in April and stayed stable at less than 400 in May until the end of the
survey
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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