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it is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings this mony should be spent on modern buildings instead to what extent do you agree or disagree

#repair #buildings #mony
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It is an irrefutable fact that
large
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 amount of
money
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 is required for the
maintance
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maintenance
 of old monuments. So expenditure should be made on the new
buildings
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 which provide
different
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 facilitates.I endorse
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the statement and the reason for the same would be discussed in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,there are many reasons for agreement.First and foremost is that provide
different
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 kind of
amenties
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amenities
.An individual
do
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 not have to face problems when they are living in the new
bulit
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built
build
buldings
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building
.All facilities are there
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 as pure drinking water,solid walls, good ambience and so on.They do not have to
spent
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 extra
money
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 on
repairing
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.
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,
people
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 can get the space to park their
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in
the
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modern
buildings
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.
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,there is no risk of stealing the car and
saves
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the
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personal property from getting
damage
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damaged
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.To illustrate,most of the citizens like to park their
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in the building parking area to save guard their
vehicle
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vehicles
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 from getting
damage
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.
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,another factor worth mentioning is that
masses
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 can elevate their living
stardard
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standard
standards
.They can get all comforts in the new
buildings
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.Most
of
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the
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people
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 prefer to buy
the
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houses which are made
of
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new
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a new
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 style and with
latest
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the latest
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 technology.
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,
people
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 can save their
money
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 for other activities.They have to spend
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people
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money
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 once only and they get
the
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all new
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all-new
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facilitices
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facilities
.To cite an example,public purchases the building which
are
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 made of good
material
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materials
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 and of new style so that they do not have to spend additional
money
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 on
repairing
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To conclude
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,I deem that
money
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 should be spent on
the
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modern
buildings
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.
Although
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,new
building
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buildings
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 provide different
type
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types
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 of facilities and
people
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 can save their
money
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 for later use.They can live their life happily in the modern
buildies
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building
buildings
 and develop their
stardard
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standards
 of living as well.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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