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playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Acquiring Knowledge of playing a musical instrument, as if each child attains a significant goal. I feel that the statement is not true and I will explain in my essay now.
Firstly
, in today's educational curriculum, there are many areas of knowledge which were established
according to
 the need of humans through centuries. A standard society needs scientists, economists and legislators and
also
 artists to perform
accordingly
. By focusing on achievement in one area, the others may be lacking,
for example
 in the recent pandemic, we have witnessed a dire in psychological and economic aspects of people's lives around the world. It is important to ask
this
 question, what would happen If scientists didn't discover vaccines and cures for
such
 turmoil
.
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Furthermore
, not all students have the same ability and talent to achieve goals like
this
. There are many pupils who can perform significantly in other subjects like math and science and
also
 other forms of art like painting. praising those who can play a musical instrument would discourage others to perform well in the areas in which they are interested. I do understand that many parents consider
this
 as a means by which they can secure their children's mental health, which is good. but I feel that in some cases they may seek a higher social status for themselves as well. In conclusion, playing a musical instrument is interesting but I still believe that there are more important areas in which students should feel fulfilled and be encouraged .
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