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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
t is believed by some that
people
 have multiple options in current times.
Although
 I agree to a certain extent that inhabitants of urban
areas
 have a
number
 of alternatives for almost everything related to the luxurious lifestyle, I tend to disagree with the general meaning of
this
 statement as, even today, many villagers are lacking the basic needs in rural
areas
. Most of the city citizens now have many facilities
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 for a better lifestyle. In recent few years, many cities have shown significant advancements in multiple sectors, and,
therefore
,
people
 residing in
such
areas
 are being benefited by an increasing
number
 of choices for many living necessaries.
For instance
, most
people
 living in metropolitan cities of India currently have different options for things like entertainment, food, leisure facilities, hospitals, and many other
such
 amenities.
However
, these arguments are quite contradictory for the
people
 who live in the countryside.
For example
, many recent news articles have revealed that
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number
 of suicides committed by Indian farmers have risen by 45% in
past
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 5 years, and the scarcity of food and water was the main contributing factor for
this
 occurrence.
This
 argument clearly indicates that it would be wrong or misleading to consider all
people
 nowadays have too many choices. In conclusion,
while
 I accept that most
people
 living in metropolises have
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 luxury of so many options for multiple things
due to
 a huge
number
 of developments in
last
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 few years, I
also
 believe that
this
 benefit is not applicable
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 most
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the
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individuals living in undeveloped
areas
 of a country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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