Inspite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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I know that

this

essay will not get a high score.

However

, there is a possibility that it might get much higher than I expected for several reasons. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall bring them forward.

Firstly

, the essay will not be checked by a human but by streamlined computer software.

Secondly

, there should be some more reasons that I am not aware of.

For instance

, only the word count and spelling and grammar mistakes are evidently evaluated. When you write about nothing it is definitely hard to go on writing and reach the obligatory word count

that is

necessary.

Nevertheless

, I just have to continue typing words that come to my mind even if they are not so proper and adequate. I have decided to mention a few lines about the given topic which is related to advanced agriculture and current hunger throughout the globe.

Thirdly

, personally, I am in thought that advancement in technology has brought more harm than benefit. The reason why I am writing

this

is in my everyday life I witness numerous outcomes of the trend. Families are being broken owing to the cheating of spouses on each other through the internet.

Moreover

, the young generation is becoming addicted to pornography

due to

easy access to social media. When it comes to agriculture, new chemicals are being developed using modern technology and they, in turn, damage our genes via gene modifiers. In conclusion, improvement in science and IT can never bring any good to us. We should not forget

this

both now and in the future as our predecessors will continue living on

this

planet after our generation. They have full rights to live in a better place than us.

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4 paragraphs

286 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The images below explains the process of how pollutants from modern life become acid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

As computers are being used more and more in education, teachers will soon be unnecessary To what extent do you agree or disagree

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