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Some people think that robots are important for humanʼs future development. Others think that robots have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years technology has become part of our daily life,
robots
 and artificial intelligence were designed to make our lives easier and it is one of the biggest accomplishments in human history. With the fast development
robots
 are having, some individuals think that they will harm humans and change society as we
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, others just think they are tools that are crucial for the future. I personally believe that robotics is great as long as we are able to control it. In light of the folks that believe that technologies are far more harmful than beneficial, some will say that the heavy automation of simple tasks will leave us without jobs and opportunities
however
this
 can be argued because the more automation and technology there is, the panorama of jobs that work with
this
 intelligence will just increase
for instance
 take the case the steam machine, lots of workers were afraid that they would be thrown out of their jobs and impoverished
however
 the locomotive just generated far more employment. Some see the
robots
 as hazardous and
although
 these machines aren't perfect their main motive isn't to damage humanity,for ,example take the case of robotic surgery, using
this
 method doctors can perform complex procedures that may be impossible by other methods
however
this
 method has been related to 144 deaths in us and everybody started pointing fingers at it,
nonetheless
 people tend to ignore that the robot is designed to learn and help humans which translates into
this
 method improving over the years and normal surgeries are not injury nor mortality free.
To conclude
although
 some
robots
 are not very safe right now like the case of robotic surgery,
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 strongly believe that they can bring big positive changes in the future.
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