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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that wild animals have no place in
this
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 century.
According to
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 them, protecting wild animals is a huge waste of resources. I totally disagree, I think that wild beasts are the most important actors in the progression of human life.
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, wild beasts are very important in a lot of aspects. The main and important reason for protecting wild fauna is the legacy of cultural knowledge for the next generations. We have seen that with the start of the 2000s, a lot of species of animals had disappeared because of the few protections provided by the different local forces.
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 event has been accelerated by the high amount of illegal capture of wild fauna that are in danger, to
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 sell them to the black market, as
for instance
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 the real cobra in Thailand , which in 2025 was and still is in danger of extinction .
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, the main issue that we will face if we do not protect wild beasts is that it will cause a population of some breeds. The food chain can be disrupted , and it may occur that they will not have any predators , and some others can be left without any prey.
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, it has already occurred in Japan with a huge population of raccoons that are very dangerous to the populace because of the virus that they can hold, and with no way to stop their procreation , and they do not have predators.
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, wild fauna are very important in the 21st century; their role is to help the progression of humans, because they help in killing dangerous species that may cause some issues to our people , and
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 why I wholeheartedly disagree.

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task
State your view clearly in one line at the start and give more full reasons and more clear examples.
coherence
Make a simple plan before you write: intro, 2 body paragraphs, and a short end. Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use easy link words to join ideas: first, also, but, then, so.
content
Check facts, and keep the time and place accurate. Do not mix up dates.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Break long lines into two.
content
Clear view on the issue.
content
Use of examples to back up idea.
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