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“Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?”

#“wealthy #nations #countries #relief #disasters
It is widely acknowledged that natural disasters have an
unforgetable
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unforgettable
 impact on
people
 in many
countries
 which may not
ready
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 for unforeseen disasters
due to
 massive
earthquake
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,
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fire
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of
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woodlans
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woodlands
woodland
 or
shortage
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shortages
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 of food and they may need help from the world.
This
 essay totally agree with
this
 statement that affected
these
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countries
 may not cope with
these situation
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by
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 any unknown reason and
people
 should not be
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 alone
into
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theirs
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 destiny.
This
 essay aims to explore why developed
countries
 support
people
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 and will provide supporting examples to arrive at a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
, the
countries
`
border
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 are important to prevent enemies.
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, many of them try to
fight
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 keep
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danger even if it may result
with
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 war.
However
, despite
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this
 reasons, humanitarian relief should be kept
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different category. Because
,
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 the
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by
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 disasters may lock
countries
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countries'
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 services to remedy their problems.
Moreover
, in
the
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modern times,
media
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 can provide
their
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 situation that we let them alone their destiny.
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, after
massive
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 explosion by an accident in Beirut, the city had lack of
any
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emergency services.
However
, despite watching like a reality show by
world
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, many nations gave their hand. Another important fact is humanity. Developed
countries
 always care
human
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 life and the relief help to gain more prestige in the world. Humans satisfy to help other
people
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it is a type of
rehabilition
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rehabilitation
 and
represent
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 our
strongness
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.
Moreover
, the nations
are constitute
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by
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people
which
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 include
same
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 characterization.
Therefore
,
countries
gives
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 reaction as their members do.
For instance
, after a traffic accident,
people
 collect and help each other, it is
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like
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countries
. They connect and try to send their aids. In conclusion, based on the information provided earlier, it can be deduced that nations should help each other for humanity and prestige.
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