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“Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?”

#“wealthy #nations #countries #relief #disasters
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It is widely acknowledged that natural disasters have an
unforgetable
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unforgettable
 impact on
people
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 in many
countries
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 which may not
ready
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 for unforeseen disasters
due to
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 massive
earthquake
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earthquakes
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,
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the fire
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fire
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of
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woodlans
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woodlands
woodland
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shortage
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 of food and they may need help from the world.
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these
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countries
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 may not cope with
these situation
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by
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 any unknown reason and
people
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 should not be
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left
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 alone
into
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theirs
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 destiny.
This
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countries
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 support
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 and will provide supporting examples to arrive at a reasoned conclusion.
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, the
countries
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`
border
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 are important to prevent enemies.
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, many of them try to
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 keep
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danger even if it may result
with
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 war.
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, despite
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this
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 reasons, humanitarian relief should be kept
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different category. Because
,
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by
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 disasters may lock
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countries
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 services to remedy their problems.
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, in
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modern times,
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 can provide
their
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 situation that we let them alone their destiny.
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massive
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a massive
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 explosion by an accident in Beirut, the city had lack of
any
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emergency services.
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, despite watching like a reality show by
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, many nations gave their hand. Another important fact is humanity. Developed
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 always care
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about human
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 life and the relief help to gain more prestige in the world. Humans satisfy to help other
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that
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it is a type of
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rehabilitation
 and
represent
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represents
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 our
strongness
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.
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, the nations
are constitute
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by
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people
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which
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 include
same
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 characterization.
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,
countries
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gives
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 reaction as their members do.
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, after a traffic accident,
people
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 collect and help each other, it is
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like
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countries
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. They connect and try to send their aids. In conclusion, based on the information provided earlier, it can be deduced that nations should help each other for humanity and prestige.
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