Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, there has been a growing trend in being a freelancer. Many individuals prefer working for themselves compared to working for another company or institution.

This

case may be

due to

unsatisfactory jobs

as well as

low

income

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,the situation has both its merits and demerits. In the essay, I will discuss both views in detail. On the one hand ,

theindependent

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the independent

worker trend has increasingly become popular.The First reason behind

this

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managers put more strain on tasks and responsibilities on them , they do not appreciate their skills and knowledge.

Consequently

, the employees would lose their ambition toward work .

As a result

, their passion for development will be lost as one of the important factors that employees enable them

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forward .

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,low revenue salaries and long hours of working were

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of the factors which

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them to work independently.

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, In some countries

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or Sweden, People strike asking for an increase the salary and pay more for extra hours,

On the other hand

, self-employment earn a rise salary

income

as they can purchase a house with a high mortgage and live like a class people .

However

, they are facing many problems and obstacles, which they are responsible

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to solve

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, and they have been stressed to create another idea to make their business successful.

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, at Oxford University, research was conducted to link being

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and the level of cortisone which

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the level of stress .Surprisingly, The level of cortisone was at its peak among independent workers. In conclusion , they are facing stressful

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although

gaining a high

income

While

, working for a company

also

has its disadvantages

such

as low

income

, long duration of work and more pressure with tasks.

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5 paragraphs

299 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Fully explain your ideas

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