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What are the advantages and the disadvantages of leaving your country to live and study abroad.

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Nowadays, young people tend to travel abroad seeking a better life. Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks? On the one hand, moving abroad offers the opportunity to study at good universities and get higher degrees.
For example
, getting a study visa and moving to England to study at Oxford or Cambridge University is one of the biggest dreams of many people.
Also
, having a work permit in a foreign
country
 like Canada or the USA is a significant step towards success because working in one of those countries gives you
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great experience and acknowledge career.
For instance
, if you got two years of experience working in Canada, that would benefit you with the opportunity to work in other countries
such
 as Qatar or Saudi Arabia.
On the other hand
, leaving your
country
 is not that easy because you get to leave your hometown and your family.
As a result
, you may feel homesick.
For example
, my Brother moved to Canada a month ago and he is missing home already.
Besides
, living in a completely different culture is very anxious. Culture shock is a serious problem that may lead to anxiety.
However
, you ought to learn about the
country
 you are leaving for in order to prevent undesirable customary issues. To wrap up, As far as I am concerned, I would say that leaving your mother
country
 and your loved ones is not easy. But, looking for your happiness and a better life in good conditions for you and your family is worth it, though.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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