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In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university.

#countries #people #enrol #university
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In the modern era education has become very important and there are many options for young people after completing high school
such
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university
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 , work-based training,
degree
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 apprenticeships and many more. In most ,regions
students
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 are choosing to
enroll
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 in work-based training
instead
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 of attending
university
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. In
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 ,essay we will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it.
firstly
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, there are many companies which provide work-based learning
such
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 as
degree
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 apprenticeships, graduate apprenticeships etc. Many
students
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 are applying for
this
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 kind of education because there are many benefits from
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 like the
students
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 don't have to pay for their
university
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 fees as it is covered by the Firm.
students
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 here get their own salary of around 25-30k pounds per year and after completing their 3 years
degree
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 in the company they might offer them a job with all these benefits
students
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 get 4+ years experience
while
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 working in a
real-lifelife
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real-life life
 work surrounding
while
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 on the other ,side
students
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 have to graduate from
university
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 and search for a job. Yes, there are many disadvantages of work-based training.
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,
students
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 working
while
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 doing their
degree
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 in big firms might miss out on college life where they make new friends for a lifetime etc. it's not like they are not going to make friends at the company but the people they are surrounded will be in a work alcoholic place
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students
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 in their respective
university
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 will be enjoying life and partying all night. The major advantage of work-based learning in multinational companies is that the
students
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 will always be ahead of the other pupils in
university
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 and their salaries will be way higher than college graduates. In conclusion, it all depends on the people what they want to choose
at the end
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 it's their life and we are no one to judge them.
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