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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

write a letter to a team mate who is in hospital about the match

Dear William, Hope you recovering well from your injury. I am writing
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 letter to inform you about the match we played
last
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 week. I am very happy to tell you that our team has won!
Last
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 Sunday was sunny with mild wind so we had to be well prepared for that.
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,
due to
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 the accident on Dundas Street, we weren't able to use the highway so we took a detour and reached the volleyball court just before the match started. As you know, Toronto Warriors is a very strong team, especially the players
on
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 the setter position
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 it was a tough match. As your substitute, Singh has played well in that middle position and helped us to manage their serves well. It was a very good experience and I never thought that match would go for 5 sets, interestingly it went and we won. I want to say
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 for sure, you are missed and hope you will be able to join our next tournament. Please don't hesitate to contact me if you need any help. As you are in hospital, I will make myself available for you anytime for the next two weeks. Your loving friend, John

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clarity
Consider breaking down longer sentences to enhance clarity. For example, 'Last Sunday was sunny with mild wind so we had to be well prepared for that.' could be divided into two shorter sentences.
structure
Adding a short conclusion can wrap up the letter neatly. Consider summarizing your main points in the last paragraph.
tone
You maintained a friendly and supportive tone throughout the letter, which is suitable given the context of writing to a teammate in hospital.
completion
The letter provides a clear and complete response to the task, discussing the details of the match, the outcome, and expressing well wishes.
structure
Strong greeting and closing that clearly indicate the start and end of the letter, making it formally appropriate.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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